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ThelinechartaboveillustratesthedatarelatewiththepeopletravelledtoBritainandtheUKpeoplevisitedabroadformBriitainintwodecadeswhilethesecondbargraphdescribehowmanycountrieswerethemostpopularvisitedbyUKresidentsin1999
ThroughobservefirstlinechartwecanseethatthepeoplevisitedtoandfromtheUKhaveshownanupwardtrendin20yearstime.Tobemorespecific,between1979and1985,theybothsteadygrewfrom12millionsto20millions,10millionsto12millionsrespectively,afterthat,1985onwardstheybothhaveexperiencedasoarincrease,especiallythedataoftheUKresidenttravelledtoothercountries,astonishinglyarrivedat53millionsin1999.TheriseofvisitedtheUKislowerthanformer(28millions,1999)
Accordingtothesecondbargraphthemostpopularvisitedplacewereconsistoffivecountries.ObviouslytheBritishprefervisitedtoFrancethananyothercountry(12millions,1999),.FlowedbySpain(9millions,1999).AndthentheUS,Greece,Turkeylaggedfarbehind,thefigureis4millions,3millions,2millionsrespectively.
Therefore,itcanbeclearlyseenfromthegraphthattheamountofvisitedtoandfromtheUKhasagreatincrease.Bycontrast,theUKpeopleliketovisitFrenchandSpainverymuch.